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    Hello! My name is Laura, welcome to my blog! I write weird stories, collect dragon plushies and stay up too late with my nose in a book. I am a wife, mom and child saved by grace. My hope is that you find encouragement here or at least a smile or too.
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  • “Now go, write it before them in a table, and note it in a book that it may be for the time to come forever and ever.”
    ~Isaiah 30:8.

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    We have come from God, and inevitably the myths woven by us, though they contain error, will also reflect a splintered fragment of the true light, the eternal truth that is with God. Indeed only by myth-making, only by becoming 'sub-creator' and inventing stories, can Man aspire to the state of perfection that he knew before the Fall. Our myths may be misguided, but they steer however shakily towards the true harbour, while materialistic 'progress' leads only to a yawning abyss and the Iron Crown of the power of evil.
    ~J.R.R. Tolkien

    "The only just literary critic," he concluded, "is Christ, who admires more than does any man the gifts He Himself has bestowed."
    ~J.R.R. Tolkien

    “Fantasy is escapist, and that is its glory. If a soldier is imprisioned by the enemy, don't we consider it his duty to escape?. . .If we value the freedom of mind and soul, if we're partisans of liberty, then it's our plain duty to escape, and to take as many people with us as we can!”
    ~J.R.R. Tolkien

    "Writers who see by the light of their Christian faith will have, in these times, the sharpest eye for the grotesque, for the perverse, and for the unacceptable. To the hard of hearing you shout, and for the almost-blind you draw large and startling figures."
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    You write to communicate to the hearts and minds of others what’s burning inside you. And we edit to let the fire show through the smoke.
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    Words - so innocent and powerless as they are, as standing in a dictionary, how potent for good and evil they become in the hands of one who knows how to combine them.
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    "There are forms of insanity that condemn people to hear voices against their will, but as writers we invite ourselves to hear voices without relinquishing our hold on reality or our right to control."
    ~Writing Fiction by Janet Burroway

    Christians have sometimes been suspicious of stories, because they really can influence you. If you read the Twilight novels once a month for a year, I think you'd be a different human afterward—and not a sparkly one.
    ~Nate Wilson

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“Legion” Revised

The ending of “Legion” wasn’t quite what I wanted it to be, but I couldn’t figure out a way to improve it.  The other day a friend and fellow writer saw what needed to be changed and pointed it out for me.  (Thank you Ed! 😀 )

Here is the revised ending.  (I’ve updated the original post as well.)

Pain!  Pain tore through me, but it was a good pain, the pain of pulling a thorn from your flesh.  Before a minute had gone by, it was over.  I heard pigs squealing in the distance, but that didn’t matter, only the man before me mattered.  My mind was clear, the voices were gone.  No longer would they torment me.  Love. Pure, honest, love filled my senses, replacing the agony that had consumed me for so long.  A new voice, soft and gentle whispered through my heart, “You’re sins are forgiven my beloved.  Be made clean.”  Tears fell down my cheeks as the past melted away behind me.  I was free, I was whole again, I was loved and I was forgiven.     

“Oh my Lord, I will follow you forever.”

Jesus laid his hands on my shoulders, his gaze over flowing with kindness, “Go home, and tell your people of these great things the Lord as done for you, for He has shown you great compassion.”

“Yes Lord.  I will.” 

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  1. Taylor Weller

     /  September 24, 2010

    Amazing! Fantabulous! Extracular! I love it! An ending worthy of a Ted Dekker novel!

  2. Yes, this new ending’s better. =) I love how you brought the story to life!!! Great job!

  3. Great story Laura. I really like how you put the reader right in the story. 🙂


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